老師您好，請您對我寫的一篇英語作文的中間三段進行修改(也就是刪除開頭段和結尾段之後的段落),作文的要求是介紹一個你的同學

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老師您好，請您對我寫的一篇英語作文的中間三段進行修改(也就是刪除開頭段和結尾段之後的段落),作文的要求是介紹一個你的同學，並且內容段部分第一段是describe his life as a child(用過去時完成)，第二段是描述他現在的生活(用現在時)第三段是描述他將來的計劃(用將來時)。請老師對我的語法進行批改並適當根據我的水平加一些例如名詞性從句或者形容詞性從句。謝謝老師,您辛苦了！
When Kevin was a child, he liked playing soccer and table tennis. During playing, not only he made many friends but also he learned that how to communicate with other and what is solidarity. After class, he always played with them and then finished homework together. At that time, he was very happy. Like most boys, he also liked car very much. To my surprised, when he was 12 years old, he was learning to drive. Although, it was illegal. Now, he is no longer a child and has 27 years old. He becomes more modest and realistic. He wants to improve his English, so he takes part in TIEP. As a student, he studies very hard and always finishes homework very conscientious. In his * time, he likes playing PS4 which is a game console. The reason is that when he playing game, he feels extremely relax. Except playing game, he likes cooking himself. He can cook many different food which is very famous local food in his country. However, he almost thinks that he cook’s food is not very delicious and he should do more practice. In the future, Kevin wants to get a good job which can get much money and great work environment. When he has earned enough money, he is going to buy a new house and car. The house which has two floors, and the car which brand is Nissan. After that, he will married his girlfriend and then builds a family. Finally, he will travel around word with his wife and child. The reason is that he wants to taste each country’s local food and learns different culture.
請老師對一篇高三英語作文的中間三段進行修改和補充，謝謝

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解題思路： 主要不是一些語法錯誤，多多留意，要注意一個完整的句子裡面只有一套主謂結構，所謂的完整的句子，指的是以句號結尾的句子，若有其他的主謂結構，你就要考慮是不是從句。
解題過程：
When Kevin was a child, he liked playing soccer and table tennis. During playing, not only did he make many friedns but also he learned how to communicate with others and what is solidarity. After class, he always played with them and then finished homework together.At that time, he was very happy. Like most boys, he also liked cars very much. To my surprise, when he was 12, he was learning to drive, though it was illegal.
Now, he is no longer a child and is 27 years old. He becomes more modest and realistic. He wants to improve his English, for which he takes part in TIEP. As a student, he studies very hard and always finishes homework on his own. In his spare time, he prefers to play PS4,a game console. The reason is that when he is playing, he feels extremely relaxed. In addition to games, he is also fond of cooking. He can cook different kinds of foods,which are all local specialties（特色）.However, he is still not satisfied with his cooking and thinks it needs improving.
In the future, Kevin wants to get a good job and make a large amount of money on the condition of good working conditions. After he has earned enough money, he is going to buy a swo-storey new house and a new car.Then, he will get married and start his own fammily. Finally, he will travel around the world with his wife and child and taste the food of different countries as well as learning their cultures.