要當範文的英語文章,高手幫忙改改錯誤或者又什麼更好的都可以說

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要當範文的英語文章,高手幫忙改改錯誤或者又什麼更好的都可以說
文章如下——
I’m growing up
I’m growing up day by day,I’m growing up into a strong-minded girl.Both my body and my mind have grown much.
The wheel of life has rolled fast and it past fourteen years.Before that,I’m just a little girl.I loved toys and skirts.My friends and I always played in the parks and it’s normal to have a fight with others.Gradually,I would rather talk to friends on the phone than play in the parks.I don’t like colorful skirts any more.And the books instead of my toys .Formerly,my friends and I must be together everyday,but now,good friends just like stars.We don’t always see each other,but we know we are always there.I’m growing up,we’re growing up.
As time went by,I become taller and taller and my heart is stronger and stronger.I cry less and less,smile more and more.The ups and downs of the life made me strong.The growth told me that the life is a road full of frustrations.And we should always keep our heart facing the sun and it would bring us hopes.
It is said that,the power of life is the power of growth.I want to say I AM GROWING UP loudly .To tell the truth ,I am a girl who bothers to grow up sometimes.Even so,I’m grateful that I’m growing up all the same.

解答：

急你所急.
既然不能太難,我就不拔高了,至少幫你掃清所有的語病.相信你這篇可以成爲範文：
I’m growing up
I’m growing up day by day.I’m growing up into a strong-minded girl.Both my body and my mind have grown a great deal.
The wheel of life has rolled fast and past fourteen years.Before that,I was just a little girl.I loved toys and skirts.My friends and I always played in the parks and it was normal to have a fight with others.Gradually,I would rather talk to friends on the phone than play in the parks.I didn’t like colorful skirts any more.And I liked books instead of my toys .Previously,my friends and I must gathered together everyday,but now my good friends are just like stars.We don’t always see one another,but we know we are always in one another's heart.I’m growing up.We’re all growing up.
As time went by,I became taller and taller and my heart is stronger and stronger.I cried less and less,and I smiled more and more.The ups and downs in life made me strong.My growth experience tells me that life is a path full of frustrations.And we should always keep our heart facing the sun and it will bring us hopes.
It is said that,the power of life is the power of growth.I want to say loudly:I AM GROWING UP!To tell you the truth ,I am a girl who is sometimes worried about growing up.Despite that,I’m grateful that I’m growing up all the same.