請大神幫忙修正這篇作文中的語法錯誤

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請大神幫忙修正這篇作文中的語法錯誤
I agree with that 「people in their right mind never take pride in their talents.」 Because if a man becoming proud,he will attain less achievement then he should be.The fables in order to tell people it is wrong to become proud exist in all culture.This is a general idea that people should not take pride even though they really have some talents.
In ancient China,there was a child who was called genius by all other citizens,for he is able to write poetry when he was just 7 years old.His father was really pride of his son,and takes him all over the country to show his talent,it makes the child do not want to continue study at all.His name in the history was just a 「genius boy」,nothing recorded about him after he was 12 years old.In Chinese history,there are hundreds of genius boy recorded,but only a few of them got some real achievement in politic,literature or science.The only things of them recorded in the history book were just the story about their childhood.
The other reason why people should not take pride of their talent is the pride will make them look down on others.It is no doubt that to jealous men who have better life or talent is a kind of human nature.Some genius were persecute by others even there was no recorded of they did not respect them.So if the genius take pride and contemptuous others,they are more likely to be treated badly,or even others just refuse to help him,few things can be done with only one genius.
To keep modest does not mean to have few confidences; a man who does not believe himself will also have nothing serious done,self confidence is as important as modest.The hard thing is to find the balance between enough confidences and proud,genius need to be careful didn’t get too much in each side.
To be concluded,People in their right mind never take pride in their talents is a truth; only by obeying this rule can the genius keep their talent and success in life.This is also for parents,that they should not make their genius children become proud,for example,by flaunt their talents to all friends,it will the child look down other children.
如果我能成功加分到A以上(現在是B),
問了幾個老外..我還是選雪水飄飄同學的了..zhangxuyang抱歉了.....

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嘿嘿,我來幫幫你看:
I agree 【with the statement that】 「people in their right mind never take pride in their talents,」 【because if a man becomes too proud,he will achieve less than what he could have achieved.】 【This kind of aphorism warning】people 【about becoming too proud exists】 in all 【cultures】.【There】 is a general idea that people should not take 【too much pride in their success】 even though they 【might actually】 have some talents.
In ancient China,there 【once】 was a child who was 【named】 genius by all 【the】 other citizens,【because he could】 write poetry 【at the age of seven】.His father was really 【proud】 of his son,and 【took】 him all over the country to show 【others】 his talent.【However,because of this,】the child 【did not】 want to continue 【his studies any longer】.His name in the history books is simply】 「genius boy」,【and nothing was ever】 recorded about him after he was 12 years old.In Chinese history,【hundreds of talented boys were noted】,but only a few of them 【achieved success】 in 【politics,literature,or science.】 【For most of them,】the only things of them recorded in the history book were 【stories】 about their 【childhoods】.
The other reason why people should not take 【too much pride in】 their 【talents and successes】 is 【that】 pride will make them 【more likely to】 look down on others.【To be jealous of men who lead a better life or have more talent is】 human nature.【Throughout history,there were often geniuses who】 were 【persecuted】 by others even 【though】 there was no 【record】 of 【there having been people】 who did not respect them.【The conclusion is that if】 the genius take 【too much pride in their talents】 and 【treats others with contempt,】 they 【are】 more likely to be treated badly,【and others might refuse to help him.】 Few things can be done with only one genius.
To 【be】 modest does not 【necessarily mean one must have low self-confidence】; a man who does not 【believe in】 himself will not be able to【accomplish anything great,as】 self confidence is 【just】 as important as 【modesty】.The hard thing is to find the balance between enough confidences and proud,genius need to be careful didn’t get too much in each side.
To be concluded,People in their right mind never take pride in their talents is a truth; only by obeying this rule can the genius keep their talent and success in life.This is also for parents,that they should not make their genius children become proud,for example,by flaunt their talents to all friends,it will the child look down other children.
文章改了一半,我有點事情,待會兒回來繼續改 :)你先看看吧,

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