幫我修改修改希望英語風采大賽的自我簡介

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幫我修改修改希望英語風采大賽的自我簡介
幫我修改修改吧!
Self_ Introduction
By Wiskey
Hello,every one!Do you know Whisky?Yeah,of course,I think every body knows the wine Whisky.So,please remember,I'm Wiskey.But I assure you,I am not the Whisky what you are thinking about.W-I-S-K-E-Y,Wiskey!Now,let me tell you something about myself.
Above all the subjects,I love English best.Learning English is an enjoyment for me.I can still remember that last year an oral English Competition was held in Jiang Xi Province.
I haven’t taken part in an Oral English Competition before.So,I hesitated.I thought that maybe is a hard thing to do and I didn’t have enough confidence.But in fact,I really want to have a try.Mother noticed all of these.She can read me like an open book.She said to me,』dear,there is nothing to be afraid of.Everybody should have their first time.If you don’t want to have a try,how can you touch success?Take a step forward,and then you can succeed.Remember,compared with process,result is not so important.You need more and more opportunities to practice,from them you can improve not only your English level,but also your experience and courage.The enemy you’re facing are not others,but yourself.So,please believe yourself and have a try!』
Mother’s words really encouraged me.I made up my mind.At last,I won the third price.From then on,I didn’t hesitate any more,and I like to accept challengers.『Challenging myself』 is my motto.Now,this motto brings me here again.I love this chance,and expect to get your precious advice or comments.
That’s all.
Thanks.

解答：

1.I haven’t taken part in an Oral English Competition before.這句中應該用過去完成時吧,就是說用hadn't
2.I thought that maybe is a hard thing to do and I didn’t have enough confidence.在這裡,maybe後面加的應該是一個完整句子,它本身不作主語,在maybe後面加個this吧.
3.You need more and more opportunities to practice,from them you can improve not only your English level,but also your experience and courage.這裡的第一個逗號後由於沒有連詞,所以是非限定性定語從句,from them應該改爲from which,要不在from前面加上and.還有這裡的level可省去,不然顯得有多餘.
4.Remember,compared with process,result is not so important.如果是靠語感的話,應該在with後面加上定冠詞the,要注意這些細節性的問題.
5.From then on,I didn’t hesitate any more,and I like to accept challengers.後面的like,這裡忘記了是用過去式吧.
6.The enemy you’re facing are not others,but yourself.這裡是用the others.
基本上還可以,如果初中水平的話,確實不錯,繼續努力吧,不明白就發信息給我吧