求改英語作文李華寫一封信告訴老師他近期的學習情況要求1：學習生活緊張而充實2.各科成績都很好,3.你的夢想開頭：Dear

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求改英語作文
李華寫一封信告訴老師他近期的學習情況
要求1：學習生活緊張而充實
2.各科成績都很好,
3.你的夢想
開頭：
Dear MIss Mike
I『m very glad to receive your e-mail
There are some information with me to you
when i became a high school student,I found that the life is different from past.Our study and life not only very nervous but aslo rich.That made me more like the new life
I often use a lot time to study,so my all subject is well expect math.Because I too lazy to not want do it,and I decided to learn it more and more
I perfer worker than becoming a enginer ,so I must spend any time with it and you will see me in the TV or news shortly after
結尾不打上來了= =,求老師糾正下

解答：

Mrs.Mike   Mike是男名   some information  about  me  i  want to tell when 改成after 比較合適,when是那個時刻,可是生活的不同時在那之後發現的nervous一般形容心情焦急,換成stressful比較好a lot of 或lots  of,不能只用a lotsubject要加s,它是可數名詞i『m  too lazy少了m,而且too...to已經代表太懶不想做的意思,後面不能加 not want do it,還有兩個句子連結不對,要用but now  I decided to learn it much  harder  I perfer becoming a worker than enginer spend much more time on it總的來說,即使改正那麼多錯處,這篇文章也不是很好,感覺支離破碎,沒有連接性,同學你要好好練練作文啊,多加一些精彩的句式和單詞,句子也不要再一句一句的說了,這樣得不了高分的.望採納.