寫了一段英文歌詞,求修改,看語法方面有沒有用錯!

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寫了一段英文歌詞,求修改,看語法方面有沒有用錯!
菜鳥寫的一段英文歌詞,求修改!
Maybe I have a deep love you.
也許我已深深的愛上你
though break up been a long time,
雖然已分手很長時間
but i miss you is every day.
但我每天都在想你
This pain I was going crazy!
這種痛苦讓我快要瘋了
If God can fulfill my just one desire,
如果上帝能滿足我僅僅一個願望
I wish I could have lose memory.
我希望我可以失去記憶
Baby,Only in this way,
寶貝,只有這樣
Before I can forget you.
這樣我才可以忘記你
Front eyes of the beautiful picture,
眼前浮現的美好畫面
and now remove all.
現在全部刪除
oh,.baby baby baby.
Let me lose memory.
讓我失去記憶
Forget this regret love.
忘記這遺憾的愛
though I was reluctant
雖然我很捨不得
Let me lose memory.
讓我失去記憶
Let the pain away from me!
讓痛苦離開我
lose the memory.
失去記憶
oh......

解答：

我不太懂音律,試著讓它通順一點吧~
Maybe I am deeply in love with you.
也許我已深深的愛上你
though we have broken up long before(ago),
雖然已分手很長時間
but i miss you everyday.
但我每天都在想你
The pain is making me crazy!
這種痛苦讓我快要瘋了
If God can make just one of my wishes come true,
如果上帝能滿足我僅僅一個願望
I wish I could lose my memory.
我希望我可以失去記憶
Baby,Only in this way,
寶貝,只有這樣
can i ever forget you.
這樣我才可以忘記你
beautiful scenes appeared in front of me,
眼前浮現的美好畫面
make them gone away now.
現在全部刪除
oh,.baby baby baby.
Let me lose my memory.
讓我失去記憶
Forget this regretable love.
忘記這遺憾的愛
even though I don't wanna let go.
雖然我很捨不得
Let me lose my memory.
讓我失去記憶
keep the pain away from me!
讓痛苦離開我
lose my memory.
失去記憶
oh......