求英語大神來幫我看看我的這兩句句子語法上有沒有錯誤,能幫我美化一下更好,

題目：

求英語大神來幫我看看我的這兩句句子語法上有沒有錯誤,能幫我美化一下更好,
It is relaxing to enjoy the sweet music when you are reading a book.in a pleasant weather.
If you want to live a more enjoyable life ,the first point ,you must find a great job.

解答：

第一句還ok吧
If you want to live a more enjoybale life,the first thing is that you must find a great job.